Two Thumbs Up For..

24 01 2010

Olivia, Mitch and Keegan – for answering a seemingly silly question with a more serious and thoughtful message.





Poverty Reflection Comments

14 10 2009

Who knew that grade 8’s could be so thoughtful? I did of course and perhaps a few others but now you have successfully put proof out into the universe. I have read all of your poverty reflection posts and for your first venture into the world of blogging they were well done.

A few overall comments for you to consider in future posts.

* Just because you are typing your post right into blogger does not mean you can skip the editing stage of writing. Almost all of your posts have typos or missing words that would have been caught by a good editor. Before you hit publish, have someone else read your post and edit.
* Try and focus on one main idea for the entire post and develop it over the course of your 2 to 3 paragraphs.
* Use a combination of re-tell, relate and reflect in each post.

View these posts by your classmates for examples of solid level 3 work. Feel free to model your own writing after any of the strategies your classmates have used.

* Post focused around a clear main idea – Lizzie
* Creative use of supporting details – Alex
* Strong introduction – Emily
* Thoughtful conclusion – Lauren

Keep up the good writing!